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Leaving Hope

written by: Matt Watson

I felt this familiar feeling
over come what I thought was lost.
I form a string of verses - words and phrases,
and I give them meaning for all to hear.

I held onto what you taught me.
To never look back, never regret.
Yet, apart of me can never move on,
and wants to go back
to that time and place,
where dreams were endless.

When we only saw each other
while facing the darkness.
When it was just you and me
facing this fear, never alone.

Or will I just have to move on
and remember that familiar song?
That we used to laugh, together with
Hopes and dreams that
now seem so long lost.

Comments:

Matt Watson

Thu, Jun 19, 2008 at 11:53PM

Just expanding a topic. Using some said advice with sentences in the verses.

(I thought about using the second last verse as a chorus to make this into a song, but I'm not sure. So could use some suggestions on that.)

Sweet Insanity

Fri, Jun 20, 2008 at 6:46AM

I like that idea, but I think that should be the first verse. i don't think that the verse you have first really fits with this poem. I think that if you take that out this poem would really Rock! I like the rest of it a lot!! I think it's pure! You don't have to change it... it's just a suggestion. Great Job!

Matt Watson

Fri, Jun 20, 2008 at 7:41AM

Hmm. It does sound good without. I use that verse for something else then. :P

Thanks for the comments! ^.^

Sweet Insanity

Fri, Jun 20, 2008 at 4:16PM

Anytime!

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