I really like this poem it hits home to me because am right where you are

Swearing in poetry cheapens it dramatically but gives it a realistic tone. I can produce the same effect without swearing, but, this is all a matter of style and preference. It doesn't matter what I think about your poem because the poem should represent you and if you are representing yourself honestly, then, that's what matters. Personally, I was distracted from the real message because of the wording you used.

Considering that he is feeling that might be why he chose to swear. When he was writing, if its how he's feeling, you know right there that he was angry. Or maybe he was just looking for a rhyming word. Good poem either way.

Of course. If that's what he's feeling, he's being honest and I can appreciate that. If it's just there to fit into his rhyming scheme, then that's another thing. Rhyming is okay in moderation, but, it shouldn't take over the whole message or any part of the message. You shouldn't alter the message of your poem only to perfect your rhyming scheme. I do not believe that is the case here. Here, the author is being honest I believe. There is a tone of anger I can feel. Since this poem invokes feeling, it is effective.

o.o.....I'm female...LOL x.x

Thats funny I thought you were a guy

lol...thnx...lol

But I love this work though

:-)

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