We are turning this into a song! See Me!

i have to agree this could very well be a song.
i like the the very last stanza best though..cant put my finger on it but i really like it. its like never losing hope to me.

I agree with justthatgirl18. The last stanza sort-of... pulls you. It's as if it's saying "Stay true to what you believe, don't lose grasp of your dreams."

You're amazing. ;]

I was just thinking this would be an amazing song!

'You said "believing's like breathing"
And somehow you were always right
So I wish I may, I wish I might
Have this wish I wish tonight'

Loved it. Excellent work. It has a very fluid feel, and the imagery is good. The first stanza opens up with almost a feeling of indifference, and then, the second to last stanza brings the subject to a desire to believe. The last stanza expresses a firm confidence that it isnt in vain, and encourages others to do the same. The format is great. Good work!

i like the message best. its like you get a picture when you read it.great use of imgery.keep up the good work

The entire poem has just got it, what would be the "Chorus"
"You said "believing's like breathing"
And somehow you were always right
So I wish I may, I wish I might
Have this wish I wish tonight"

Its pure genious. The whole thing is just written out the way life is, with depression, and faith, hope,and just good human nature. I love this Poem.

i like it...a lot

It's beautiful!

amazing.... :) you are really good at what you do.

it was breathtaking!!!

My favorite part was in the end when the stars are gone, the sun is still a star to wish upon. I love the message. Very nice work! :D

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