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A lonely night a lonelier day

written by: Sweet Insanity

A lonely night a lonelier day
but I know I can't make you stay
If you want to go there is nothing I can do
I just keep hoping you won't say we're through

Each second life gets harder and I don't know what to think
I try to move I start to sink

My mind won't budge I'm getting no where
So overwhelmed I no longer care

A lonely night a lonelier day
but I know I can't make you stay
If you want to go there is nothing I can do
I just keep hoping you won't say we're through

Remember the smiles I remember them well
It felt as though I was under a spell

Remember the kisses so warm and so sweet
Our hearts racing faster with every beat

I don't forget the arguments, I remember them too
But much much more I can't forget how it felt to be loving you

A lonely night a lonelier day
but I know I can't make you stay
If you want to go there is nothing I can do
But Please remember I will never stop loving you

Comments:

Tue, Mar 27, 2007 at 12:23AM

I thought you said you couldn't write? I think this poem reads very well. It's simple, straight to the point. The rhymes aren't complex, but it doesn't feel like you tried to hard to make them work either. They flow more effortlessly than usual with you. My favorite has to be the title though... not sure why exactly, it just stands out to me.

Tue, Mar 27, 2007 at 12:33PM

i love this.

Mon, Jul 2, 2007 at 10:24PM

Reads more like lyrics than poetry.

Tue, Mar 18, 2008 at 7:40PM

Great, simple alliteration, and great clarity

Tue, Mar 18, 2008 at 8:04PM

Thank you!

Tue, Mar 18, 2008 at 10:04PM

Check out my stuff, I would love comments

Mon, Mar 24, 2008 at 1:56PM

I agree with the comment made above about it being more like lyrics then poetry. But that's o.k, isn't it? I mean it reminded me of something Christine McVie would have wrote, and I love her lyrics. Simple but expressive of the hearts feelings.

Wed, Mar 26, 2008 at 11:49PM

i feel ya on this one.

Thu, Mar 27, 2008 at 12:27AM

o and i really want to better myself. if you wouldnt mind checking out any of mine itd be greatly appreciated..constructive criticisim is welcomed.

Thu, Apr 17, 2008 at 5:21PM

Very nice. ;D

Sat, Apr 26, 2008 at 9:40AM

Wow, this one spoke a part of my life. I agree that the simple and lyrical way it is written out makes it that much more enjoyable. Very nice!

Sat, Apr 26, 2008 at 6:44PM

Hey not to be annoying but people who commented on this one, could be awesome and check out some of my stuff

Fri, Jul 25, 2008 at 6:39AM

At the end of the day are lyrics just poetry anyway? I mean some lyrics rhyme etc just like poetry but not all poems rhyme just like lyrics....

I really enjoyed reading this piece.
Well done!

xEx

Fri, Jul 25, 2008 at 8:38AM

Thank you so much! Yes, I agree that some poems just lend themselves to music. I'm glad you like it!

Tue, Jul 29, 2008 at 3:47PM

i love this. it's great. I've been in the same situation. with friends (they left my life) and boyfriends.

Thu, Aug 14, 2008 at 2:52AM

my fav line is i try to move i start to sink.
its a very well written poem, concise and well communicated: msure a lotta people relate to this one:)

Sat, Sep 27, 2008 at 6:58PM

I can actually relate to this poem. Excellent work! I love it!

Sun, Sep 28, 2008 at 4:54PM

Thanks!

Sat, Oct 4, 2008 at 1:37AM

Its simple and effective, filled with inner debth on so many levals. Its a poets dream poem. And the fact that it sounds like a song makes it even better, if you ever want to make a song out of it, and make some more cash.

Mon, Apr 13, 2009 at 9:38AM

I liked this poem, It really flows. Nice work.
You can read mine, (The Positive Vives) and send a comment.

Sun, Apr 19, 2009 at 10:08AM

Beautiful. I'd be beautiful as a song, too. I agree.

Sun, Apr 19, 2009 at 12:16PM

Thank you!

Wed, Apr 22, 2009 at 10:15PM

great poem but simple at the same time awesome

Wed, Apr 29, 2009 at 6:15PM

I love your poem becuase it saids everything i felt during my breakup with my fiance of 6 years, alot of emotions and feelings go through your head when u love someone so much, but sometimes you have to let them go, thats what i did...to make a long story short thanks for writing this, it feels good to know someone can write about what others experience with out knowing one another...your poem was great, ill keep reading if u keep writing...good job!

Thu, Apr 30, 2009 at 4:59PM

Wow! That is by far the best compliment I've ever gotten. I'm so sorry that you had to go through this. I'm glad my words could speak to you! Thank you for reading!

Sat, Jan 16, 2010 at 11:54AM

you have well expressed your thoughts. i do like it

Wed, Jun 2, 2010 at 9:59PM

holy shit... why am i just finding this NOW! haha, i loved it! keep it up ;)

Wed, Jun 2, 2010 at 10:40PM

LOL! Thanks!!!!!

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