I like this poem :) It's good

Thank you very much!

This kind of reads like noises a machine makes in a factory. Repetitive, persistent, stubborn, and unrelenting. The style compliments the meaning quite well.

Thank you! That was what I was going for! Kind of like a train... the I think I can train... pushing... driven! I'm glad it came across

It's good. I like the line , 'The end.' But then you let us know it's not the end. It was a good clue as to what you were trying to say to us.

Thank you! I'm glad that you got that! It's like when you're fed up and you can't do anymore and then you realize it's not in you to stop.

u r definetely right, there is always hope, if we know how to look:)))

i feel this way right now. thank you. i also know the feeling of hopelessness "the end" is trying to convey. seeing that it is bigger than you, and saying no...i won't/can't quit. lord i get it. thanks!!

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