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Psycho and Rice Krispies

written by: justhatgirl18

Psycho and Rice Krispies

My rice krispies speak to me
They tell me what to do
My rice krispies tell me to kill
They tell me to kill you
I tell them I don't want to kill
Especially not my friend
But then they tell me lies that make me think again
Then my rice krispies told me that I should kill some more
So I told my rice krispies I aint gonna kill no more
They said to me, "you will do what we say", "or else we'll get you too"
So I said rice krispies have you met my friend Mr. Spoon?

shannon b.

Comments:

alf hickey

Thu, Mar 27, 2008 at 2:18PM

thanks for your encouragement. Ths is a very funny piece f writing. I love your work ! So innocent and crazy : )

Sweet Insanity

Thu, Mar 27, 2008 at 5:12PM

That's really cute! I love the story itself and it has a nice feel. Just a thought, you may want to look at the lines where you have "kill some more" and "kill no more", the repetitiveness is slightly distracting. Aside from that, it's a very funny piece!

armandopereira

Mon, Apr 21, 2008 at 1:59PM

Hmmm...Mr Spoon, the arch nemesis!

Sweet Insanity

Mon, Apr 21, 2008 at 11:10PM

HA! That's Great!!!

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